I admit it's sort of a tongue twister, but most people have never seen it before, so it's been a really good icebreaker for me when I'm in a gathering such as teaching a class. But the translation also has a nice sound to it, so I can see your point as well.

I'm not sure which way I'd lean if I had to pick one right now.

~ Vanxa

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You see Grazhir cracking open in one sharp movement.
The World Dragon emerges, roaring soundlessly.
It moves to sear Katamba to a lifeless black.
You see the night sky, filled with stars.

I know and can confirm 4. I speculate there are 5.