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A murmur of hope sweeps back through the long line of migrants. You rush forward to view what has caused people;s spirits to lift.
Should be people's not people;s.
Also, a couple paragraphs repeated, but I couldn't tell if it was just the vision starting to loop or what... Examples:
Your sight swirls and shifts, the world fading into darkness. Everything is black, to the point that even your hand is invisible when held in front of your face. Your ears sharpen in the absolute darkness. The pounding of tribal drums can be heard faintly in the distance, which is soon accompanied by a chorus of howls. Suddenly all noise ceases, and light returns once again.
A Rakash storyteller, her elderly form decorated with beads and feathers, sits cross-legged in front of a small group of children, their ages and races varying greatly. A small butterfly alights on her shoulder, and as she speaks to them, the sky begins itself to shift, the clouds and moons painting the images the storyteller weaves with her words.
Sorry for double post, but this seems like a bug?
The visions bleed from your mind as you awaken from your trance. The first sensation you experience is a devastating chill as you realize that the fire has gone out and no longer warms the cavern. Suddenly, a sharp pain pierces your skull as the statue that you reverently placed inside the niche tumbles down and strikes you, leaving you sprawled across the stone floor. A feeling of emptiness pervades your soul as you lie stunned, cold and utterly alone.
>
Several brown, dry leaves blow in through the cave entrance, hitting the far wall and settling on the cold cavern floor.
>
Purple flames waver across the fire on the floor.
>whimper
You whimper.
>
The shattered pieces crumble into a fine dust.
>
*The fire on the floor crackles as a shower of sparks rises from it.*
>
The cold draft dies down a bit, then picks up again, the dampness soaking through your clothing.
>whimper
You whimper.
>l
[Awksa Dzilvawta Ala]
Sandstone and earth form a narrow, long cocoon with just enough height to stand upright. The roughly chiseled ceiling and uneven walls appear deliberately patterned. Directly in front of a small niche, recessed into the back wall, are remnants of a fire that scorched the earthen floor. You also see a fire.
Obvious exits: out.
>sigh
You sigh.
>get stat
You get a Enelne statuette from inside your spidersilk haversack.
>get log
You get a log from inside your spidersilk haversack.
>put log in fire
*You add a log to a fire.*
>
The log smolders in the fire.
>
The log in the fire bursts into flames.
>get log
You try to pick up a burning log, but drop it immediately from its intense heat.
The visions bleed from your mind as you awaken from your trance. The first sensation you experience is a devastating chill as you realize that the fire has gone out and no longer warms the cavern. Suddenly, a sharp pain pierces your skull as the statue that you reverently placed inside the niche tumbles down and strikes you, leaving you sprawled across the stone floor. A feeling of emptiness pervades your soul as you lie stunned, cold and utterly alone.
>
Several brown, dry leaves blow in through the cave entrance, hitting the far wall and settling on the cold cavern floor.
>
Purple flames waver across the fire on the floor.
>whimper
You whimper.
>
The shattered pieces crumble into a fine dust.
>
*The fire on the floor crackles as a shower of sparks rises from it.*
>
The cold draft dies down a bit, then picks up again, the dampness soaking through your clothing.
>whimper
You whimper.
>l
[Awksa Dzilvawta Ala]
Sandstone and earth form a narrow, long cocoon with just enough height to stand upright. The roughly chiseled ceiling and uneven walls appear deliberately patterned. Directly in front of a small niche, recessed into the back wall, are remnants of a fire that scorched the earthen floor. You also see a fire.
Obvious exits: out.
>sigh
You sigh.
>get stat
You get a Enelne statuette from inside your spidersilk haversack.
>get log
You get a log from inside your spidersilk haversack.
>put log in fire
*You add a log to a fire.*
>
The log smolders in the fire.
>
The log in the fire bursts into flames.
>get log
You try to pick up a burning log, but drop it immediately from its intense heat.
