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I'm going through and updating the wiki lists and noticed this:
Prep Phrase #449:
- Using both of your index fingers, you trace the outlines of your [eye characteristic] eyes and carefully whisper the hymnals of the [spell name] spell. Tapping your [complexion] eyelids closed, you release the spell...
- Using both of his index fingers, Mourne traces the outlines of his narrow eyes and carefully whispers a soft hymnal. he taps his dusky golden eyelids closed for the briefest of seconds and releases his spell...
- A soft hymnal drifts in from somewhere nearby.
- Spell Restriction: 311
A hymnal is a book of hymns. A hymn is a song. This doesn't make sense as written. Also, second sentence in third person view needs capitalized.
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Walsor Gryhm says, "Hmm, a most impressive weapon of note. I'll give you 16 silver coins for it."
You think to yourself, "This deal is getting worse all the time."
Another one:
Prep Phrase #461:
- You mutter a half-hearted attempt at [spell name], causing a small stormcloud to form above your head. As you finish your incantation, a fall of misty droplets rains down upon you, dissipating as they make contact with your form...
- Mourne whispers to himself, his gold-green eyes enshrouded by a vibrant sanguine haze. Rivulets of bright red rise through his skin, thickly coating his arms and hands, disappearing as it makes contact with the ground...
- A phrase of whispered words and a puddle of bright red liquid appears, quickly dissipating into the air.
The third person and invisible on this one don't match the first person, they appear to be parts of #462.
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Walsor Gryhm says, "Hmm, a most impressive weapon of note. I'll give you 16 silver coins for it."
You think to yourself, "This deal is getting worse all the time."
Prep Phrase #461:
- You mutter a half-hearted attempt at [spell name], causing a small stormcloud to form above your head. As you finish your incantation, a fall of misty droplets rains down upon you, dissipating as they make contact with your form...
- Mourne whispers to himself, his gold-green eyes enshrouded by a vibrant sanguine haze. Rivulets of bright red rise through his skin, thickly coating his arms and hands, disappearing as it makes contact with the ground...
- A phrase of whispered words and a puddle of bright red liquid appears, quickly dissipating into the air.
The third person and invisible on this one don't match the first person, they appear to be parts of #462.
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Walsor Gryhm says, "Hmm, a most impressive weapon of note. I'll give you 16 silver coins for it."
You think to yourself, "This deal is getting worse all the time."
#461 seems to still have some issues:
Prep Phrase #461:
- You mutter a half-hearted attempt at [spell name], causing a small stormcloud to form above your head. As you finish your incantation, a fall of misty droplets rains down upon you, dissipating as they make contact with your form...
- Mourne mutters half-hearted to himself as a small stormcloud forms above his head. As he finishes his incantation, a fall of misty droplets rains down upon him, dissipating as they make contact with his form.
- A phrase of whispered words and a puddle of bright red liquid appears, quickly dissipating into the air.
3rd person, 'half-hearted' looks like it should be 'half-heartedly', and the invis messaging is still listed as the messaging from 462.
#449 is still showing 'hymnal' in the invis messaging.
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Walsor Gryhm says, "Hmm, a most impressive weapon of note. I'll give you 16 silver coins for it."
You think to yourself, "This deal is getting worse all the time."
Prep Phrase #461:
- You mutter a half-hearted attempt at [spell name], causing a small stormcloud to form above your head. As you finish your incantation, a fall of misty droplets rains down upon you, dissipating as they make contact with your form...
- Mourne mutters half-hearted to himself as a small stormcloud forms above his head. As he finishes his incantation, a fall of misty droplets rains down upon him, dissipating as they make contact with his form.
- A phrase of whispered words and a puddle of bright red liquid appears, quickly dissipating into the air.
3rd person, 'half-hearted' looks like it should be 'half-heartedly', and the invis messaging is still listed as the messaging from 462.
#449 is still showing 'hymnal' in the invis messaging.
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Walsor Gryhm says, "Hmm, a most impressive weapon of note. I'll give you 16 silver coins for it."
You think to yourself, "This deal is getting worse all the time."
